7/5/10

An alabaster cigarette
curled fog around your wrist,
like silkworms weaving sweat
inside a spool of morning mist.
Nicotine-laced neon lights
burned lemon in my eyes.
The chain smokers will fade

but darling, I feel so alive.

12 comments:

  1. Congratulations on your Poetry Blog of the Week nomination! I am so proud of you! I love that the rest of the world get to appreciate your sweet, king, gentle, beautiful nature through your amazing words.

    Congratulations my beautiful girl.

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  2. Blogger has brain fever or something, and my comments aren't working properly, but maybe yours are, so I'll try to leave one here, ok?

    This poem....oh stoppit, show-off. This is gooood. The whole smoke/silkworms/mist part is stunning, I loved it. And then you kind of wind up the end, the mood wobbles a little and then, bam, "I feel so alive". The whole thing crackles, and the picture is great, too. Well done!

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  4. So good to read this, darling! This is such a relishable piece to read as is all of your writing. I have been dying for a cigarette since morning and now it feels like i just had one. This is so thoughtful of you and so sweetly sentimental for smokers like me.

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  5. I have followed your blog for quite some time, and I just adore your poetry. You continuously amaze me.

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  6. Excellent photo and poetry combo.
    Your lines paint a vivid picture
    giving one the feeling of experiencing
    the moment.
    Thank You for visiting Forest River Journal.
    Yours,
    Edward.

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  7. This is amazing! I think it's by far my favourite

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  8. Hi, I like others am spellbound by the rich imagery, so sublime. Alabaster is one of my most favorite words. Bye

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  9. I am thrilled to have you share your work.
    love the stunning imagery your words paint.
    delightful read.

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  10. I am smitten with this poem! I love your style...I love the image...I wish I wrote this!!! Its fantastic!

    Much love,

    Annie

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  11. I soooo agree with what Annie said, you are awesome and I so enjoyed this read!! Thanks so much for linking with Potluck...it is wonderful to have you there :) xx

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  12. The afternoon image stole my heart.. wonderful attempt.. Thanks for linking your treat..

    :D

    Happy Potluck

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